Wednesday, September 26, 2007
Responses Section 20
If you are in Section 20 (T/Th 11:00-12:15), please post your responses here. Put your name on your response, and refer to the authors, so they can tell which comments are about their fairy tale. You are to say what you like about the tale and WHY you think that aspect of the creative writing or the image works so well.
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Once upon a time, there was a rich man who had a wife and a pretty daughter. Their daughter’s name was Young-hee. When Young-hee turned two years old, her mother passed away from illness. Few years later, her father got married with other woman and they had another daughter whose name was Sun-hee. Her father and stepmother were happy for few years and then they started argue often. They had big argument one day. And then, their father left home and did not return. Stepmother waited for him everyday with tears but he never returned. After that she started abuse Young-hee all the time. All the hates about her husband became anger to Young-hee. Stepmother abuse Young-hee more and more. Sun-hee felt bad about her sister but there was nothing she could do for her. One nice sunny day, one of the enormous festivals was opened in their town. Young-hee and Sun-hee was exciting to go to the festival. When they tried to go out together, stepmother stopped Young-hee and Sun-hee. She yelled at Young-hee not to go out and took her clothes and shoes away. Young-hee cried in her room and could not go out because stepmother took away all her other clothes as well. Sun-hee came into Young-hee’s room and gave her clothes and shoes back without her mother noticed. Young-hee was so happy that she could go to the festival as well. Young-hee thanked to her sister and they promised to keep their secret. When Young-hee was on the way to go to the festival, she was trapped on the rock and her shoes slipped off. When she looked up, one man held her shoes and tried to help her to get up. She formed a connection with him after that day. They finally fell in love each other and got married. Stepmother got so jealous about Young-hee so she tried to break her happiness. However, Sun-hee found out about her mother’s plot. Sun-hee persuaded her mother to stop her plot with her whole heart. Her mother repented for all her sins finally. Young-hee also forgave stepmother about what she was been to her before. Therefore, Young-hee and her husband lived happy forever and also as her stepmother and Sun-hee.
I am reponding to Kristina Ulrich's "Chiquita Muneca". Kristina, I just loved your story. Your use of descriptives is rich and vivid. Though prose, it almost feels like poetry. Also, I really responded to the quiet wisdom in Chiquita Muneca, who heals with herbs and runs and sleeps with Puma. Great Tale!
I am also charmed by Requelinda's "The Little Red Riding Hood In Reverse". I thought it was very clever and unexpected that the two stories of Little Red and Three Pigs were combined. I liked that through collaborative efforts they took on the wolf and won. And I especially liked that it was the Little Pig who deals the fatal blow! Nice job.
I am first responding to Cristin Crafts' modernized Hansel and Gretal. I thought this was a great story. It really related to the class, which you knew was going to be your audience. I also related to this story because I am also a twin and know that I love to spend time with my sister. I think you did a great job showing their bond, and definitely agreed with you about not using parents and crumbs. The way you wrote the story was modernized and I found it very amusing. To be honest, I really can not say many bad things about it. I just think that maybe when the two bad roommates are discussing the plan that you should maybe introduce a little earlier. But overall I think you did a great job !
I am also responding to Michael DiCandia's Antoniella. I definitely enjoyed reading this Italian version of Cinderella. I liked the Italian background. I also thought you did a great job using analogies. The way you wrote your descriptions about how ugly the sisters were really gave the reader a mental picture, which is what I like to have when I read stories. I did feel that maybe you should have stated Antoniellas 12:00 curfew. When she started to change back into her old clothes, you can understand if you know the background of Cinderella, but the reader may not know or may not want to assume. Also you might want to move the facts of her mothers kindness (I.E. giving money to the poor) up in your story. I think it would be better in the introduction of the mother and then her dying etc. It will really give the reader a picture of how good she was before you get to your ending. Other than that, I am part Italian and was very interested in the heritage you brought to the story (the "evil eye"). It was great!
I'm responding to Staci Young's version of Cinderella. I really liked how you intertwined the versions of Cinderella and The Little Red Riding Hood together. I thought it was really interesting to have two characters named Cindy (in reference to Cinderella) and Red (in reference to LRRH) together. It made me wonder how the two characters might act towards one another if they were both in the same story. Another part that made me like your story was that there was a twist at the end of it. I actually had to go back and reread parts of the ending when the "wolf ate his cake", I had to go back to where he referred to her as "angle cake". I thought that was clever. The moral was clever too and very fitting, that beauty does not mean brains. Great Job!!
I also wanted to comment on Maxwell Cemeno's artwork. Hah! I thought that was awesome!! It gives a whole different twist to the classic tale of LRRH if SHE ended up eating him. If that was the story, we'd have to watch out for Little Reds. ;) I thought your artwork said a thousands words and that you did a really great job with the project. You're a great artist. It was nice to see someone else create something in a visual media. Well done! I also like how your artwork leaves it open to question if whether LRRH ate the wolf upon meeting him in the woods or upon eating him after he ate grandmother. Nice job!
I am commenting on Britanny Benn comic of The Dust Bunny. This rendition of Cinderella, I felt, was very creative. The comic was fun and interesting to look at, and followed the steps of Cinderella. I saw that she mentioned in her statement about the absence of the symbolic shoes, but I felt that the search worked out perfect and how the little girl saw the ears all the way in the back. The comic seemed very well put together and was a new and interesting way to look at Cinderella. I also liked how she called it a dust bunny. Cinderella lived with cinder and ashes, and dust is be related to that.
Christina Dorchinisky wrote a version of “Little Red Riding Hood.” The poem was very good, and the rhythm in it was fantastic. Rhyming I find to be very hard when you are sticking to a storyline, and this came out very well written. I also enjoyed the ending with having the wolf die. Like the other versions of “Little Red Riding Hood” it still teaches a moral lesson which I found important.
Traci's tale was so endearing, her vocabulary was eloquent and the plot was original. I was very much impressed with the way that she twisted the original tale, but stray too far from it's origins. I thought the modern day-type feel was very intriguing.
Eric's tale had me cracking up! I was so surprised as I read the story, as it was so similar to the orginal tale. But, the ending was very creative and shocking, I was very impressed. What an astounding remake of a classic!
I am responding to Ashley Klaus’s “Ashton, the story of a boy, and his wicked step-father”. I really liked this story because it was for boys. We were just talking about this in my Media Studies class how many stories such as Cinderella are aimed towards girls and the boys don’t connect to the stories because it is based upon a girl, she has the main part in the story. I also liked how she made it a little more modern with the limousine instead of a carriage or something along those lines. Nice work Ashley!
I am also responding to Christina Dorchinsky’s version of Little Red Riding Hood. I really liked this. The words she chose to use were perfect. It all flowed perfectly and the part I like the most is that she didn’t totally switch it around to the point where the story gets a new meaning. I enjoyed reading this! Good job Christina!
Amrit's comment to Tracie Bolack
I liked this story because it showed that a young woman in her most dire moment did not give up her morals and values and beliefs to get out of her unfortunate situation. She just dealt with her punishment and by showing her talent of sewing as a means of expressing her affection to the 7 tiny men, she turned her clothing into a multi-million dollar business. It just goes to show that if you believe in yourself even if you have one skill, one day someone can discover you have a talent and help you succeed and profit with it. Women also do not always have to feel they need a man’s help to succeed if they are strong and intelligent and believe in themselves.
Amrit's comment to Kirk eustaquio
I liked this story because it basically is saying that one should never judge someone in a bad way because of appearance. Everyone is unique in their own way and should be given the same love and affection as others. The father and siblings who mistreated the ugly pigeon would eventually become the prey of his. The mother was spared because even from birth she always showed the ugly pigeon the same love as all of her other children. It just shows if you mistreat someone because of appearance, it may one day come back to bite you.
I am responding to Kristen Ulrich’s Chiquita Muñeca. This fairy tale was very interesting and held my attention. It included many details and some metaphors which helped me to better be able to picture what things really looked like, such as how green the girls eye’s were. The story was aversion of Little Red Riding Hood, however it was more realistic which I liked. Overall, this story was very well written.
I am responding to Ashley Klaus’s version of Cinderella. I found this fairy tale to be very interesting. I like the fact that she chose male characters instead of female. In many fairy tales, the main character is a female; therefore it’s good to see a man figure in this place. Fairy tales written for children should be written for both genders so that each gender can better understand and relate to, the fairytale. Also, I think that this story has a more modernized theme since the woman is searching for her husband. In the past, the male always used to be the one who got to choose his wife. Overall, this version of “Cinderella” was changed in a very interesting way.
In response to Maxwell Cemeno's version of Little Red Riding Hood: I really liked his artwork and it was really creative. It was very different from the original tale but it was interesting that LRRH killed the wolf. It was a really great picture.
In response to Michael Dicandia’s version of Cinderella: I really enjoyed reading his Italian version of Cinderella. It was interesting to know about the Italian culture and specially the Evil Eye which is the Italian spell. I also liked his ending that she forgave her stepsisters and everyone lived happily ever after.
I am commenting on Maxwell Cemeno's artwork. I thought it was very clever to portray Red Ridding Hood as the evil villain in the picture. I also liked how ironic it is that in your picture Red is the one who is out to get the wolf. It is very detailed and the look on Red's face is definately a look of hunger! You're an excellent artist. Keep on drawing!
I also wanted to comment on Michael DiCandia's Antoniella. Coming from an Italian heritage I really enjoyed reading the material presented in your tale. The part that i enjoyed the most was Dominic the Donkey as Antoniella's guidance figure and also the Evil Eye twist was a good touch. The use of imagery and detail that were incorporated in your tale made me feel as if I could actual see what I was reading. Great job bringing Cinderella into an Italian version!
I am first responding to Ashley Klaus' version of Cinderella. I found this version of the tale very exciting to read because of the female's being replaced with male's. It made me wonder if this were the original telling of the tale, would it have been more appealing to boys instead of girls? The story was very similar to the original which made it easy to follow and fun to read.
The second tale I am commenting on is Cristin Craft's version of Hansel and Gretel. I enjoyed reading this story because it was very modernized and also because it focused on SCSU, which everyone in the class knows about and could relate to. It was very easy to read, and the characters were all recognizable when compared to the one's from the original tale.
I choose to read Ashley Klaus fairy tale, Ashton. The story of a Boy, and his wicked Step-Father. I like the fact that Ashley choose to change the gender roles of the story, making the step-father the wicked one along with his two sons, and the motive of a princess now in search of a prince. I feel this story could be used to relate to young boys, seeing that Cinderella is more of a "girly" story. However Ashton would appeal to males because of the main character. I also found it to be a funny touch, when instead of a horse drawl carriage Ashton's pumpkin turned into a white limousine lol.
I am first responding to Annette Bakes story, Poor Nicholas. I really liked the story and how you based it on Cinderella. I thought changing the main character from a female to a male was a good idea. Since your story was based in Greece, it reminded me of stories from my country (Italy) that my Dad and grandparents told me when I was little. They used to own a farm with animals. Back in the day, if children were misbehaving they got a beating like in your story. Italy and Greece have many things in common. I really liked the ending were the stepmother and her kids got it from Niko’s Dad. They deserved to be thrown out. Excellent story.
My second response is on Michelle Coppola’s story, From Bada Bings to Wedding Rings. I have to say that I enjoyed this unique version of Cinderella. Also, I liked how you made your story rhyme. This story reminded me of one of my favorite series, The Sopranos on HBO. I can personally relate to it because you tied in so many cultural themes that us Italians are used too. Also, it was good that you included a list of unfamiliar words at the end for people that are not familiar with Italian culture. I use these words everyday. I found the ending to be funny since the stepfamily ended up swimming with the fishes. Great job.
I am commenting on Michelle Coppola's version of Cinderella:
I thought this particular version of Cinderella was very creative. I liked how she incorporated her Italian culture in at as well, it showed that she has much respect for her culture and it would also give people the perspective of her Italian culture. I thought that the story was perfectly told and It had much creativity. It was amazing that she did such a great job in putting in poetry form, considering that i absolutely suck at writing poetry.
I also chose to comment on Tracie Bolack's version of snow white:
I thought this particular version was funny and it showed some respect to women. It shows that woman don't always have to show animosity or anger towards each other. I liked that because back then women were always portrayed as being jealous and vicious towards other women and that to me was a little sexist. I also liked how she described the men just as she would want her men to be. That was a great idea and quite interesting.
EILEEN SHIM'S SISTERS
I REALLY LIKE THE TWIST ON THIS SOTRY. IT'S OBVIOUSLY FROM CINDERELLA AND I LIKE HOW YOU SWITHCED IT AROUND AND SHOWED SIBLING LOVE INSTEAD OF SIBLING RIVALRY. I MAYBE SHOUL'VE DONE THAT ON MY VERSION BECAUSE IT IS DEFINITELY UNIQUE.
KRISTINA ULRICH
I ABSOLUTELY LOVED YOUR STORY IT WAS BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN. THE LANGUAGE WAS RICH AND I CAN TELL THAT YOU TOOK THE TIME TO PUT IN LOTS OF DETAILS INTO THE STORY AS WELL AS THE USE OF SIMILE, AND OTHER THINGS TO MAKE THE STORY INTERESTINGLY CATCHING.
I'm responding to Max Cemeno's artwork "Red". I really found the drawing to be really descriptive and engaging on many levels. For one part, I feel that even someone who had no idea of the subject matter would easily figure out who the characters pictured were and what was going on. I also liked the maybe unintentional connection to "The Story of Grandmother" that we read in class where instead of Little Red eating her grandmother, she's eating the wolf. Also, I like the simplicity of the title since even though the piece is in black and white, one can still get the understanding of red and the overwhelming amount of red that would be in a colored version. The facial expressions on the characters really strike a strong point, even without the work being part of any sort of series. Personally I'd love to see the hard copy of the work, since I'm sure the scan does not do the work justice. Also I'd be interested if you did a colored version.
I am also commenting on Michele Coppola's "Bada Bings to Wedding Rings". Firstly I found the poem to be highly original. The Italian setting was very interesting and I believe that the reader understood what tale Coppola was doing even without knowing the assignment. I also like the Italian terms that were mixed in, as well as the description of what the words meant at the bottom. I also found myself having a little chuckle at the Fairy Godfather character. Mostly because the Godfather in general (especially an Italian godfather) has many stereotypes due to a certain Hollywood movie (for those who don't know, I'm referring to the film "The Godfather") I did enjoy the use of consistent rhyme, and keeping even to somewhat of a meter (even if not a strict one). I liked your modern idea of the lip gloss, even if it is a tiny bit of a stretch. I also really enjoyed how you kept the whole story modernized, and did not slip out of time.
im responce to Brittney Bann's dust bunny. i thought it was a very creative portrael of the cinderlla story. the pictures went very well with what was being said in the story. Knowing the original story it was easy to see the diffrent adaptations.
In responce to Christan Crafts story of Jermey and Hanna, i felt it was a very good modernisation of hanzel and gretal. Having two siblings who are extremly close it was easy to relate tot he story. i also felt that the story on a whole was rather beleivable. with the exception of the vampire(becuase there are no such things as vampires... It was also entertaining reading a story about people i knew. Although it be fiction, i can see where she recived her insperation from.
-jonathan walsh
I really liked Maxwell Cemeno's image of little red riding hood. I liked the fact that it was a twist and little red riding hood was the one who was predator. The picture really made you want to look at it and try to see what Maxwell was trying to say without even reading his statement.
I also really like Annette Bakes. I like that her version of cinderella was from a male perspective. I also liked that fact that the husband or father was really there for nicolas and he was did not just abandon them. I also liked that the father took the side of the son instead of his wife.
Stacy Young's , "Cinderella",:
THis tale was an awesome twist of little red riding hood and Cinderella. I knew it would be good when I saw the name Red, I couldn't wait until I got to the part or the end rather. Good story. Nice simple vocab, easy read, and fun to read.
Annette Bakes here commenting on Tracie Bolack's , "Snow White Revisited". I loved it the whole thing. I loved how it was modern and still the same idea as the original, but with an awesome update. The names of the dwarves was cute..I actually laughed when I read the names and the end of SNowwear ..good humor. I don't like much about the law and hate dealing with reading stuff about it, but this was understandable and fun to read. Good story..editing is not needing. A+ to me.
I am responding to Michelle Coppola’s story “From Bada Bings to Wedding Rings”. Her Italian version of Cinderella was very humerous and informational of the Italian culture. I like the vocabulary and the slang terminology that was used, and I also enjoyed the way she related the Italian lifestyle into her short story. Michelle also did a great job sticking to her AABB rhythm format allowing her written piece to flow nicely. Over all this story was a pleasure to read.
I am responding to Michael DiCandia’s short story “Antoniella”. The
short story is another informative fairy tale that also teaches readers
about the Italian culture. I liked how Michael incorporated a
traditional Italian Christmas song, “Dominic the Donkey” into his fairytale. I thought that it was a clever idea when Michael used Dominic as Antoniella (the Italian Cinderella) as the godfather. I also believe that the metaphors and similes that Michael used in the beginning of the short story helped to catch the readers attention because they were statements that could be easily imagined. I think that the story can use a little more rhythm to help the story flow, and not be so choppy. However, the story was well written and kept me as
a reader intrigued.
I am responding to Kristina Ulrich's "Chiquita Muneca". I really enjoyed reading this story because somehow I can relate to some parts of the story which really grabbed my attention and interest. The story showed that a person must have courage and determination to get through life, without those, life would be much more difficult. The story also showed that wisdom passed down are valuable and should always be remembered for it might come in useful at times. Since the writer of the story used a descriptive approach, it painted an image as I was reading. Overall, this was a great story.
I am also responding to Brittany Benn's "Dust Bunny". I liked the way the writer used images to better tell the story. The images makes the story somewhat more realistic. The dust bunny was a good story because it showed that people should not be judgemental of other people, which is how people usually are. Also, the story follows similar paths of other fairy tales, where the main character is mistreated and ending up as a happy ending which is always good. Overall this story was great because the images made it fun to read!
Once upon a magical time there was the most beautiful fairy Godmother. She lived a relatively routine life; just granting wishes and flying around to serve others. She always took a particular liking to her one Godchild, Cinderella. Cinderella was the loveliest girl in the lady; she had the sweetest disposition and gorgeous blonde curls. Despite her beauty, both internally and externally, she was not loved by her family. You see, the fairy Godmother was assigned to look over Cinderella after her Mother died, and she was left to live with her Father, Stepmother and Stepsisters; Cinderella was left in an environment of abuse. Her Stepmother would force her to clean the house and serve to her every desire. When the fairy Godmother saw this treatment she knew she had to come to Cinderella’s rescue.
So, on the night of the ball Cinderella's Stepmother had banned her from, the fairy Godmother found her Goddaughter in the garden, crying. Cinderella was so pleased by her fairy Godmother’s arrival, and soon began crying for she wanted to attend the ball so badly. Her Godmother made a deal with her, she would dress her and get her to the ball. The only request that the fairy made was that Cinderella was to leave the ball by midnight. As the fairy Godmother watched Cinderella leave for the ball, she knew that it would be the start of a whole new life for her godchild; she was filled with joy. About four hours later, the fairy godmother watched as Cinderella came running home, beaming, and yet wearing her former clothes. Cinderella began to retell the whole story to the Godmother that she loved so much. She told her of the ball, the dancing, the Prince and the look of astonishment on her Stepsisters’ face. Cinderella was so immersed in the story that she forgot to tell her fairy Godmother that she lost one of her shoes as she ran out of the ball at the stroke of midnight.
The next day the fairy Godmother awoke to find the prince about town, looking for the owner of the lost shoe. She flew as quickly as she could to find Cinderella, who had been put to work. The fairy told her the big news, and pushed Cinderella into the room where the Prince was. As soon as the Prince saw Cinderella, despite her servitude attire, he knew it was his beloved Princess. No sooner than when Cinderella sat down and slipped on the shoe, was she swept up, and carried away to be married to her Prince. As the fairy Godmother saw this, she knew that her good deeds were plenty worth it; she was overcome with glee for her most-favorite fairy Godchild. She knew that her work with Cinderella was done.
I chose to analyze this common story from the perspective of the fairy Godmother because I have never seen that done before. My story is still a fairytale and contains most of the same motifs of the original tale, just viewed from the eyes of another character. My goal was to evaluate how the fairy Godmother perceived her input in this classic fairytale
I also commented to Maxwell Cemeno artwork "Red." Even though it was only one picture, It was detailed enough to tell the story. I like how he flipped it around and made Little Red the killer of the wolf.
FYI: Ghostwritter00 is Patrick Johnson sorry for the confusion
I am responding to Traci's version of Snow White. I enjoyed the urban twist she put on the story and how she made the classic tale into something fresh and current. It was very appealing due to the fact that you could relate modern day circumstances into the story.
I am also responding to Ashley Klaus's version of Cinderella. It was interesting to see someone change the gender of the main character. Cinderella is such a commonly known story that it is hard to imagine a male main character taking Cinderella's role. Changing Cinderella character into a male was a simple yet refreshing twist; it was also something I never would have thought to do.
This is A Slideshow..kind of illustrations to go along with The Sleeping Giant. This is Annette Bakes' illustrations. HAve a peek!
http://picasaweb.google.com/bakesa1/TheSelfishGiantPaperRevision
Little Red Riding Hood
Little Red Riding Hood was the most beautiful woman anyone has ever seen. Every woman wanted to be her and look like her, but knew it took a special gift to look the way she did every day. People called her Little Red Riding Hood because she was no more then five feet tall, and long blonde hair, she always sported the color red in anything she wore, especially something red was always in her hair either holding it up or just for show. Walking down the street, every male figure around would stop in their footsteps to watch her walk by, and be taken away by her beauty. All the guys would try their hardest to get to meet her and hang out with her, but for whatever reason she wanted nothing to do with that. Every Saturday, Little Red would go visit her grandma in the city. She would walk there and spend the day with her. Everyone knew this and would wait for her arrival to walk by and catch a glimpse of her beautiful physique.
There was always this one guy who would always try and talk with her the most. She would always be polite and talk with him, but never wanted to hang out or anything more, but he did not want to hear the word no out of the most beautiful girl that ever gave him the time of day, even if that meant just speaking to him. So he did what he had to do, and went to Little Red’s grandmas and pretended to be her by taking her and tying her up in the closest to Little Red would not know the different totally.
Little Red showed up and gave her grandma a great big hug. She says to her grandma,” How come you are so warm?”
Grandma answered by saying, “ I was a little cold and put on a sweater.”
Little Red replies by saying,” why is your voice so deep now grandma?”
Grandma replies by saying,” I had a little cold, dear.”
Grandma then said to Little Red,” why don’t you come and lay with your grandma seeing I’m not feeling well.”
Little Red replied by saying,” Grandma I don’t want to get sick, so I’m just going to sit in the chair and keep you company.”
Grandma then proceed to get out of bed and go after Little Red to get another hug, and even tried to get a kiss and then some from her.
Little Red saw what was trying to be done, and then knew that it was not her actual grandma. Even though Little Red was beautiful, she was not what you would call a smart and intelligent person.
Little Red said,” grandma I’m not feeling well myself, I made you some brownies and I’m going to head off home and take some medicine to feel better.”
Grandma proceeded to chase Little Red down the street until Little Red’s fan club of people on the street saw her getting chased and jumped in to stop the fake grandma attacking Little Red.
Little Red was so thankful that she gave every one of the men who helped her out a hug, and they were more then grateful. To get that much from her was more then they could of ever asked for.
Little Red went home and from then on, always checked to see if it was really her grandma whenever she went over to visit her.
She was the little girl that always had a smile on her face. She would stroll through the town as if she were floating on clouds. She was Marica Lyte’s little girl. Her name was Delight also known as Sunshine. She was the youngest on three girls n her family. Her mother loved her almost more than her other two daughters. She was her pride and joy. One afternoon as Delight was playing out back in the yard her mother called for her to come inside. She never disobeyed or talked back to her mother. She ran into the kitchen to find her mother making sandwiches and placing fruit and meat into the basket on the kitchen counter. Delight was so ecstatic that she eagerly ran to grab a sandwich. “No, Delight these are not for you, your grandmother is feeling ill and cannot go to the store. She asked if I can bring her some food to last her until she can get on her feet, but I Can’t go because you know your father is finally coming home from the war”. “Daddy is finally coming home, when, where, why?”said Delight. “Tonight around night fall and the war is over, if you go now you can be back before he comes” said mother. “Okay mama I will go. Her mother finished the basket and then escorted Delight to the door. “Now don’t talk to strangers go straight there and then come right back, you wouldn’t want to be late when your father gets here now will you?” “No mama” “go on now” said mother. When Delight left out the door her sister Dalia came down the stairs “ where is she going?” said Dalia, she is going to give your grandmother some food, this house is a mess and you know I have to clean up before your father comes home.” “I wanna go” “NO!!!! Only she can go, I mean no I sent her already” said mother. Dalia stormed back upstairs. Marica went outside and looked to see f her daughter was in fact going down the right path. She went back into the house and made a phone call “Yes she on her way now….okay but please don’t hurt my baby….i just need time” She hung up the phone and started her work on the house. Delight was half way to her grandmother’s house when she came across a baby wolf that seemed to be injured. She want closer and the baby wolf said “please little girl go into that house down the road and get my mother I need help. Delight said okay but first she would drop off her grandmother’s food. On the way to her grandmother’s house a man with a red coat approached her sayings “are you going to n my way to do that.” Said the man. When they got to the house her grandmother came to door, it seemed that she was on her way out “Hi grandma you are feeling better, well here is the food you asked for, I have to get back home daddy is finally coming home.” “Did you say your father is coming home?” said grandma. “Yes and he will be there before night fall. I’ll see you later grandma, oh yes this guy is here to how you are doing.” She ran right down the road and when she came across the area where the little wolf was , he was gone. So she went to the house that the baby wolf told her to go to early just to see if he was okay. She knocked on the door to have the baby wolf answer the door, no longer in pain. “Are you okay, did your mommy help you?” “Yes said the baby wolf, well I have to go, bye” and the wolf closed the door. When she was almost to her house she saw the same guy that came to see her grandmother, and he signaled her to come to him. So she did and when she did her grandmother came out of the car, she had a sad look upon her face and she began to cry. The man asked her her name and then told her that her mother told him to take her with him up north. She tried to tell the man that she had to get home to finally meet her father, when the guy went to grab her to put her into the truck she yelled and screamed and kicked. She yelled to her grandmother to help her but her grandmother just cried. The man finally got Delight into the track. And all her grandmother could hear was little jolly, Delight screaming that she wand to se her father. When night fall came Marica waited outside to wait for her husband. When she received a phone call saying “ I have her now you can sleep at night you are not a mother at all and I hope this will make him happy. Be aware this is only temporary and I will be back and then you would have to let him know or else she is a dead little girl” at that moment her husband came into the house. Marica daughters came down to greet their father. “Daddy!!” “ How are my two daughters and wife doing?”
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