Wednesday, September 26, 2007
Responses Section 17
If you are in Section 17 (T/Th 9:35-10:50), please post your responses here. Put your name on your response, and refer to the authors, so they can tell which comments are about their fairy tale. You are to say what you like about the tale and WHY you think that aspect of the creative writing or the image works so well.
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In response to Kamrun,
I really liked reading about the Bengali culture, since I didn't know anything about it previously. I think it was interesting to see the language and customs intertwined with the tale. Basing the tale on a culture you are familiar with, helped me think of it as an older tale, rather than a modern day story such as many people wrote.
In response to Kristy's version of Little Red:
I really liked your twist on grandma. I always thought of her as being so old and frail, almost in her death bed. I didn't expect her to be so strong and fierce, but it was amusing to picture an old lady that way. Your tale also showed the teamwork that Granny and Little Red used to conquer the wolf, which showed a good lesson.
In response to Leandra Bryant's version of Three Bears, I really liked it because although it was very different from the original tale it was easy to connect it to the original tale. I also liked that she chose to write about the life of modern college students because that it something very relatable too while also holding symbolic meaning. The modernization of the tale also made it more interesting and something that young people will relate to better today because more people are going to be worried about losing their Uggs rather than their porridge.
Justin Violette’s version of Hansel and Gretel was great. It was very interesting, modern, and clever. His idea of having the step mother drug the children and then push them off the Grand Canyon really showed how mean the stepmother was. It was also well written and highly interesting throughout.
i am responding to Heather Hoffman's Once Upon a Boy. i really liked the angle she took on the story and putting the main character as a gay man in today's society. by making the story the way she did it would appeal to a wider audience. the story wasn't the so called "norm" and did not have the traditional ending of a woman living happily ever after.
i am responding to Britanny Benn's Dust Bunny Comic from the other section of the class. i really like he turned a bunch of old toys into a story. like how he gave the Ken and Barbie doll a snobby attitude, because they looked rich. so basically the other toy groups took on the role of the stepsisters. the little girl in the story was the "prince" in a since that she takes the bunny home to live a happy life.
About "Maggie and Michael." I really enjoyed reading this story because the father received the jewels and money and also a job position. So that hopefully him and his children would never have to starve again. "And they all lived happily ever after." The thing I love most about fairytales :)
Kristy Schumann's Story
I really liked this poem because all the words went together so perfectly. It rhymed and had a cool and positive ending. I love to write poetry and I really admire this piece. A bit of humor is also added to the story which is always entertaining
Kim Witiak's "Dancing Ella" was a great poem that captured the essence of the Cinderella tale and put it into a more modern setting. The rhyming and rhythm made it easy to read and very enjoyable. It was well written and had its own unique twist to the story.
"Rajkumari Kongkaboti" by Kamrun Nahar was a different take on a familiar tale. I liked learning about bits of culture from a place I'm not familiar with. It had all the elements of the classic Cinderella tale, but I liked how the mother didn't die but became a cow and her magical guardian. I liked the element that even after the cow dies that the mother's love continues and that the girl's mourning is what prompts the change which makes the girl live happily ever after.
I really enjoyed Kerrie Weeks Little Red Riding Hood poem. I thought that it was really creative and showcased the story well through rhyming. It was short and to the point. I really enjoyed the poem.
I also liked Kimberly Witiak's Dancing Bella. I am really drawn to the rhyming stories. I feel the story is playfull, with a great stoy line. I love that it is about dancing. Great job.
I am responding to a poem written by Anonymous abut Red Riding Hood. I liked how you made the child and grandmother capable of defending themselves. A child and older person should realize that they can and should defend themselves when being victimized.
In response to Anonymous - a story about Michelle and Samual. I enjoyed the twist and new setting of the story. It is good to see a story about the rich having some of the same troubles as the poor. In today's times, that story could really relate to certain children. Once again the good characters are victorious.
i am posting a comment for Sam Rodriguez's version of Cinderella. I thought that the his ideas were very good! Creating a story about a modern day Cinderella was a way to reach out to today's young population! I really enjoyed it!
I am posting a comment to Kim Witiak's version of Cinderella. I thought that she presented her poem very well! It rhymed and was very whitty! I also liked to idea about making Cinderella a dancer and having her dancing be her "prince".
In response to "Dancing Bella" by Kim Witiak:
Charming, witty, and genuine! This version of Cinderella was so well done. The piece was entertaining throughout and reminded me of a modern day Cinderella. It seemed like the tale was taken from real life experience, and that always makes for a great read! I felt what the main character was feeling while reading and that kind of vivid detail was provided by your great use of imagery! Really well stylized, organized, and thoughtful writing. Very enjoyable to read!
In response to Samantha's version of "The three bears":
The artwork in the tale was very well done! I especially enjoyed the differences in the pages, no two were alike. Each page seemed to create its own mood or theme. In just a few slides you were able to tell the whole tale of the three bears and that was great! I enjoyed the pictures of goldie trying to sit in the chair and eating the porridge. Capturing the theme of the story and the nicely done slides made this version of the three bears, very entertaining. I think so much of a story can be understood by visualizing, and this was a great example! Children would be sure to enjoy a tale presented in this fashion. Nice job!
In response to Tanya Risucci,
I really liked her version of Snow White because she was able to write it along an interst of hers and keep it on the story line of the fairy tale. Writing this way works so well because it becomes personalized when you write about one of your interests, it can also make it more enjoyable for the reader.
In response to Jennifer Hatfield,
I really enjoyed the poem Lily Rose. I thought that it was great how Jennifer added in a reason of getting riches and furs if something caught her. It gave more of a reason to catch her then just to eat her. I also liked her use of words so that the poem flowed nicely with every other line rhyming. Reading the poem you could easily follow the storyline and see everything that occurred, which made it very enjoyable.
In response to Rebecca Moulton's Maggie & Michael..
I really enjoyed this tale it kind of reminded me of the tale our teacher read to us the first day of class. It was interesting to see how the children were able to make their way back home as well as what happened to their mother at the end. Good things come to those who least expect it.
In response to Sarah Curley's Orphan Ella: I really enjoyed your version of cinderella it was short, but right to the point and it a twist unlike the other versions where the king had a prior wife, which nowadays you see a lot of.
In response to Tracie Bolack's version of Snow White, I really enjoyed the spin that was put on this original tale. The fact that Snow stood by her own morals was a great message and also the ending proved that doing so can bring success. It was entertaining to see the different names of the dwarfs as qualities of an ideal man, and also the difference in the way that Snow did not have to do anything for the men, she was granted the ability to do what she loved, sewing. Overall, I agree with the artist's statement discussing how the tale relates to women's morals, and that women should believe in themselves and stick by these beliefs. This story definitely captures that theme successfully and creatively.
In response to Kimberly Witiak's poem, I really liked the creativity put into this version of Cinderella. It captured my attention to begin with because I was a dancer for many years. The poem was well written, and the rhymes seemed to flow smoothly. In the artist's statment, it is made clear why a rhyming style was chosen, and I believe that when appealing to a younger audience certain methods such as rhyming is very effective. The moral at the end of the story to always follow your dreams was portrayed very well through the character's perseverance throughout the plot. Overall, I feel that this piece was well thought out and successful in conveying the artist's own perception of the original version of the tale.
In response to Kerry’s version of Little Read Riding Hood,
I really liked your version of Little Red Riding Hood. Keeping the same theme in mind this tale was more realistic and up to date. The use of the language was very creative specially the conversation between each other. Also, the blue talking bird, who saved Pinky from her punishment was different than the real version, which made this tale more interesting.
In response to Lea’s version of Cinderella,
I really liked your version of Cinderella. You chose to use a guidance counselor as a godmother, which was very realistic, because in reality there is no fairy godmother to help one out. This tale showed that anyone can help others in their worst situation, if they are willing to do so.
Jennifer Hatfield's "Little Rose"
I chose to read this piece becuase I was interested in reading a fairy tale from a classmate in poem form. The changing of the character name from Red to Rose was creative and I felt that I knew the Poem was of "Little Red Riding Hood." I still had a sense that the Rose was an innocent, sweet, young girl, but there were some phrases Jennifer used that gave me a sense she had another side to her. Jennifer said she had a fake facade and she was flirtatious, which gave me the idea she wasn't so innocent and had a tendency to tease others, especially men. The ending was also creative by using cleverness and quick thinking, Rose was able to decieve the wolf. Also, Jennifer modified the story to bring it to modern times with the line, she should have just grabbed a lift instead. The last point I would like to make is that the purpose of the story was really noticeable and the lesson about women being careful to losing their "gift" to aggressive wolves (men) can be seen easily. Nice job Jennifer!
In response to Kerry McQueeney’s “Pink Ribbon”. The updates were great and very realistic, a lot more believable. It felt more like reading a story than a fairy tale which helped the lesson get across easily. I also like how there was justice at the end, the bully didn’t go unpunished and no one got hurt.
In response to Samantha’s Three Bears pictures. I liked how each picture seemed to perfectly capture the mood of each scene of the story, especially the last two. The pictures summed the story up perfectly, even with so few of them. They all cut straight to the point.
Kamrun's tale of Cinderella was fascinating. The tale sounded like it came right out of book of classic fairy tales. I think that Bengali is Indian and when I read the queen was turned into the cow, I felt someway that was special. I say this becuase from my knowledge cows are sacred in the Indian culture. Then when the father remarried and the stepmother was evil to the daughter, I knew it was a story of Cinderella. The cliche of the "glass slipper" which was the nose ring also made the tale recognizable. I enjoyed reaching a different cultures take on a childhood tale I once read.
In respondse to Kerry's version of little red riding hood i thought that the rhymes all stood out nicely and made it fun to read.
I am also a fan of andrew steeles version of 3 little pigs and the way that it ends with the pigs picking apart the wolf and using it to help build their houses.Well done
In response to Sarah Curley's story, I really enjoyed how she changed the story of Cinderella around. I like the fact that the King ended up being the prize and became more of a father in her version than in the originals. I thought using Ella's hair color as a symbol in place of the archetype glass slipper was very creative! Overall, I really enjoyed reading what she wrote it you can tell that she put a lot of effort into her final piece.
In response to Jessica Doyle's Snow White: I liked how the jealously was between siblings instead of child/stepparent. Having siblings myself, I can relate to the animosity felt at times (although I have never planned to kill a sibling... well for real anyway :)) I liked the importance of the father in the story since other fairy tales he is absent or distant. Overall I thought it was very creative in details written. Great Job!
In response to Maxwell's version of "Little Red": I absolutely loved the image of little Red as the killer and the wolf as the vicitm. The image itself was so realistic and it leaves the audience in suspense about what happend in the story to lead up to this ending. Little Red looks moe like a monster with her claws in this image, which completely works with her being the killer.
In response to Elizabeth,
I liked how she did her fairy tale in the form of a poem. It was very original and I thought that she really took a chance writing in this form. It worked because she made references to the original Cinderella story. I thought it was really different how she incorporated a grandmother into the story and I thought that it was particularly interesting how she ended each verse with "mutter grandma" or "shout grandma."
in response to Leandra Brant's story, i liked that the story was centered around a modern setting with characters that can be related to. To me your story most definitely seemed like it could be an allegory to the Goldilocks fairytale which if you look at the story from that point of view, it kind of makes sense. Adapting the story to a modern setting expands the audience yet still keeps the main tenets of the story intact.
In the response to Tyler Greco,
i really liked reading your version of Cinderella. It was easy to relate how the boy symbolized Cinderella and that his bat was like the glass slipper. I also like how the step mother was making him do chores and helping his father instead of getting to go out for the tryouts. in the end it was good to see that he signed the contract and everything worked out in the end.
In response to Samantha version of three bears: I enjoyed the drawings of your version and the detail you put into each of the frames. looking at each frame tells the story well. I liked the last one the best with her waking up screaming seeing the 3 bears standing over her.
Ronald Turner's version of little red riding hood was very interesting. The story as an urban version better relates to a certain percentage of the population than others. I imagine that kids from Harlem would rather hear an urban version of the story compared to the brothers Grimm. The unique take on this story enables the reader to identify with the story and it has relevance. overall, the style was unique and a great work
I enjoyed Kristina Ulrich's story,
"Chiquita Muñeca".The change in setting to the jungle where many fairy tales don't take place and the introduction of a new animal, the puma, added to the story; it made it different and interesting and caught my attention. I liked Puma and the girl got along, it was an unexpected twist, a happy ending. I also liked that she wrote that the girl learned from her brother- and showed the nature of respect in the way that the little girl didn't freak out when she came in contact with the puma. I think that would be an important lesson in the story if it were to be told to young children.
I really liked Michelle Coles version of Cinderella. It was very similar to my version which is what caught my eye. I liked how she changed the glass slipper to christian louboutin shoes. I did something similar. I also really liked the name of her high school and how she used the last names of the characters to describe them. I think this fairy tale was well done and really enjoyed reading it.
I also liked Marlene Moutela version of snow white. I liked how she put the twist in it the best. THe eye for and eye theme is an important lesson children should learn, but not at such a young age. i think this version should be for children a little older. a very young child wouldnt really understand this, or would takt the wrong message from it. for instance, a kindergartener, would think, well he took my block do i'm going to wack him upside the head. thats an eye for and eye! But, I really did like this story and envoyed reading it!
In response to Kerri Weeks Little Red.
i found it easier reading in the form of a peom. although not much of the tale itself was changed i found that it help the tale along and gave it a rythm in the form of a peom.
Emily's, Kim W's, and Jenny's responses can be found in the comments section with the tales themselves.
I really enjoyed Sam Rodriguez's version of Cinderella... i think the modern day twist was great with alot of details.
I thought that the poem about little red riding hood by "anonymous" was great... it ryhmed, it was funny and the ending was great. i really like how grandma and little red are quick and smart and save themselves. great twist.
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